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Elizabeth's avatar

If you're the naptime novelist, I'm the naptime reader! This had me absolutely riveted while waiting for my little guy to wake up.

Bridget Riley's avatar

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Katherine Mansfield's avatar

This was such a good read that I want more!!! I love the two POVs in two time periods. The ship sinking was so tense. Thanks for including the historical basis for the story, too, that was super interesting.

Bridget Riley's avatar

Thank you so much, Katherine! I’m so glad you enjoyed it!

just mud by Ron's avatar

You really pulled us in with this read, Bridget! I like that the story is set 'back in the day' and is historical too.

We were in Kansas City last summer; sorry we missed this tour. Great read!

Bridget Riley's avatar

I’m so glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading!

T. D. Wolf's avatar

Absolutely wonderful!

E.B. Howard's avatar

This was fun! I don't know the history of the Arabia, so I got nervous there.

Jasini KC's avatar

It's been a few years since we've been to the Arabia. Usually only when someone is visiting from out of town who wants to see it.

A.C. Cargill, All-Human Author's avatar

I'm doing an article on some writing advice I've seen and want to mention this post as an example of using sentence/paragraph length to illustrate pacing, if you don't mind.

Bridget Riley's avatar

Sure, that's fine!

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Mar 7, 2024
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Bridget Riley's avatar

That’s fair. I generally try to keep paragraphs a little longer during calmer or lower-action scenes, and then I shorten them during more intense or action-packed ones. Or, if I’m doing poetry or creative nonfiction, sometimes I’ll add more paragraph breaks, dividing lines, etc., to encourage the reader to slow down.